Read the following excerpts from the draft and revision of the Declaration of
Independence
DRAFT:
[T]he history of his present majesty is a history of
unremitting injuries and usurpations, among which no one
fact stands single or solitary to contradict the uniform
tenor of the rest, all of which have in direct object the
establishment of an absolute tyranny over these states, to
prove this let facts be submitted to a candid world, for the
truth of which we pledge a faith yet unsullied by falsehood.
REVISION:
The history of the present King of Great Britain is a history
of repeated injuries and usurpations, all having in direct
object the establishment of an absolute Tyranny over these
States. To prove this, let Facts be submitted to a candid
world.
How does the revision support the purpose of the declaration better than the draft?
A. The revision uses more figurative language, conveying the emotional impact
of the revolutionary efforts more effectively.
B. The revision is more concise than the draft, conveying the message more
quickly and clearly.
C. The revision uses more appeals to kairos, conveying the immediacy of the
need for independence.
D. The revision uses more emotional language than the draft, conveying the
urgency of the issue at hand.