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Dear journal, I'm not an outdoorsy kind of girl, but when my neighbor Adelle invited me to go camping, I could hardly tell her I was afraid of bears and snakes and pretty much any wild animal. I had images of waking up in the middle of the night, my tent shaking to the rhythm of growls. I couldn't let Adelle know I was afraid. So, I packed my bags and waited at the door the morning we were to leave. To my great surprise, I discovered that camping isn't at all how I imagined. The park ranger assured us that no bears had been seen in the last five years, and to my great surprise, Adelle's family had a pop-up camper, so we weren't even in a tent. Adelle did get to see my true colors, though, when we were hiking. We came across a snake in the middle of the trail, and I've never run so fast in my life. Snakes aside, camping's not so bad.

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adding reasons why the speaker was afraid
adding some dialogue
adding more description about what was enjoyable about the camping trip
adding more information about bears
adding a description of the pop-up camper